Sean Pendr

it was very good, i see no point with the apprentice stuff and the adults of the confederation sound like extremely selfish teenagers.......but this paragraph was very well done: "In ...

booyah howls moving castle such a great anime it made!!!!!!!

If you want i can do reviews and full edits like this, what i did for Nate on his short story The Beach: LET THE REVIWING BEGIN NOW!!!!!!!!!! ok.......if hes ...

Paolini is so a god! any anyone who disagrees should face his wrath. Poalini will slap you with his fan leters upright to the head!

if hes already outside why did he pull a fleece out of nowhere and put it one, lack of minor detail there may i suggest making a sentace lik ' ...

its wonderful i cant trully find anything wrong, not even aspelling error,(im bad a speeling when writing something.......) keep up the good work! :D

hiya EM its me forom the chat room i just stopped by to llook athe stuff you wrote.......... its very well done........i would have to say that you should describe ...

Great start but just add more detail, remember "Simplicity in detail", and just continue writing! GOOD LUCK!!!!! :D

This is probably the best thing i have read on this website so far! the characters are exilently designed and it has sort of a creepy feel to it, yes ...

Keep trying and all things will work out in the end. remember "Thoughts manifest." (eventually)........ GOOD LUCK!!!!! :D

how can the monsters be drivin off by the sheilds alone? if the monsters retreated how were they unsuspecting of an attack in the midst of battle? you need more ...

very good, very good, you have been working very hard i see and all you need to really do link together the paragraphs and events a little better. just work ...

The darkness of night was like a shadowing veil, only flecks of ivory white sone off in the skies above. oooh...i like that one......WEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! :D

Valkaries are nothing like angels in fact angels a the cristian deprival and twisted version of valkeries. valkeries are warrior godeeses, daughters of Odin, they are sent to help the ...

also in the air force IF yousurvived a plae crash limbs were most likely lost do to the in bending and riping of the aircraft. ugh who wold want to ...